Wednesday 6th January 2021 - L.O: I can co-construct a toolkit - Rokeby Park Primary School
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Wednesday 6th January 2021 L.O: I can co-construct a toolkit
We drove out the orcs from the Great Gate
and guardroom and took the First Hall. We
slew many in the bright sun in the
dale. Flói was killed by an arrow. He slew the
great chieftain. We buried…Flói under grass
near Mirrormere…came…ken we repaired…We
have taken the Twenty-first Hall of North End
to dwell in. There is good air…that can easily
be watched…the shaft is clear…Balin has set
up his seat in the Chamber of
Mazarbul…gathered…gold…wonderful lay
Durin’s Axe and…silver helm. Balin has taken
them for his own. Balin is now lord of
Moria:…today we found truesilver…well-forged
helm…made all of purest mithril…Óin to seek
for the upper armories of the Third Deep…go
westwards to s…to Hollin Gate.
…years since…ready sorrow…yesterday being the tenth
of November Balin, lord of Moria, fell in Dimrill Dale.
He went alone to look in Mirrormere. An orc shot him
from behind a stone. We slew the orc, but many more
came…up from east up the Silverlode…we rescued Balin’s
body..after a sharp battle…we have barred the gates but
doubt if…we can hold them long. If there is…no escape
it will be a horrible fate to suffer, but I shall hold.
We cannot get out. We cannot get out. They have taken the
bridge and Second Hall. Frár and Lóni and Náli fell there
bravely while the rest retreated to the Chamber of…Mazarbul.
We are still ho{ldin}g...but hope …Óin's party went five days
ago but today only four returned. The pool is up to the wall
at West-gate. The Watcher in the Water took Óin--we cannot
get out. The end comes soon. We hear drums, drums in the
deep. They are coming.
Diary entry toolkit
some dialogue/ quotes
based on individual and shared
experiences – show how you feel
(emotions and attitudes)
varying sentence length –
including active and passive
cohesive devices –
adverbials, Diary voice
conjunctions etc.
entry
toolkit
specific vocabulary relevant
to time period/setting
1st and 3rd person perspective
past tense
Thursday 7th January 2021 L.O: I can annotate a model text
Wednesday 13th January 1943 And as for us, we are fortunate. Yes, we are
luckier than millions of people. It is quiet and safe
Dear Kitty, here, and we are, so to speak living on capital.
We are even so selfish as to talk about “after the
Everything has upset me again this morning, so I war”, brighten up at the thought of having new
wasn’t able to finish a single thing properly. clothes and new shoes, whereas we really ought
to save what is left from the wreckage after the
It is terrible outside. Day and night more of those war.
poor miserable people are being dragged off, with
nothing but a rucksack and a little money. On the The children here run about in just a thin blouse
way they are deprived even of these possessions. and clogs, no coat, no hat, no stockings, and no
Families are torn apart, the men, women and one helps them. Their tummies are empty, they
children all being separated. Children coming home chew an old carrot to stay the pangs, go form
from school find that their parents have their cold homes out into the cold street and when
disappeared. Women return from shopping to find they get to school, find themselves in an even
their homes shut up and their families gone. colder classroom. Yes, it has even got so bad in
Holland that countless children stop the passers-by
The Dutch people are anxious too, their sons are and beg for a piece of bread. I could go on for
being sent to Germany. Everyone is afraid. hours about all the suffering the war has
And every night hundreds of plans fly over brought, but then I would only make myself more
Hollands and go to German towns, where there dejected. There is nothing we can do but wait as
earth is plowed up by their bombs and every hour calmly as we can till the misery comes to an end.
hundreds and thousands of people are killed in Jews and Christians wait; the whole earth waits;
Russia and Africa. No one Is able to keep out of and there are many who wait for death.
it, the whole globe is waging war and although it
is going better for the Allies, the end is not yet in Yours,
sight. Anne.
Friday 8th January 2021 L.O: I understand and can use cohesive devices
What is cohesion?
Remember audience and purpose;
maintaining correct level of formality for
the audience
Dividing information into
paragraphs with a different
topic for each paragraph.
Using tense consistently
What is
cohesion?
Organising paragraphs
logically and use
connectives/ conjunctions
Writing in well
constructed, varied
sentences
Using pronouns correctlyWriting needs to flow logically
so that the reader or listener
can easily grasp what is being
expressed.Text Doctor – What’s the cohesion
problem?
• Foxes are very intelligent creatures but sadly
they are not liked by lots of people. They are
actually very cunning and cute. They look a
bit savage but can be really friendly. But
suddenly something terrible happened when
they went for a walk in the garden.Text Doctor – What’s the cohesion
problem?
• Foxes like eating chicken and ducks and stuff
like that and they like jumping on their prey
so it doesn’t see them coming and if they
can’t find a chicken to capture they eat
insects and berries and sometimes they eat
mice or small furry animals like that and
they eat little birds.Task – Sort into correct order
What cohesive
devices helped you
organise the
paragraphs into
the correct order?People began to leave, though not very quickly. _________ seats thudded as they flipped upright. Coats were shaken out, hats pinned in place. There was a fair bit of complaining going on too. __________ we headed for the foyer. It was then that the seriousness of our situation sank in. ___________, I told myself this was no different from any other raid – and they were happening almost every day now. Most of the action was down near the docks; on Fairfoot Road where we lived, they’d been more of an annoyance, forcing you out of bed in the middle of the night and into a freezing-cold air-raid shelter. __________ the lights were off. All I could see were the outlines of the front doors and the cash desk just inside. Already the space was filling up with people – but our sister wasn’t one of them. “She can’t still be in the lavs.” Cliff’s hand felt sticky in mine. As the last few people came into the foyer, the mood seemed to change. People were hurrying, jostling into those already making their way out. __________, I wasn’t sure what to do: staff and wait for Sukie or go with everyone to the nearest shelter. Someone was shining a torch at the floor to help guide people’s feet. ________ that went out too.
Monday 11th January 2021 L.O: I can generate vocabulary and use punctuation correctly and effectively.
What is a semicolon?
A semicolon is a
punctuation mark that is
used to separate certain
pieces of information in a
sentence.Rule Number 1
To separate two independent clauses
that share the same theme.
E.g. I went to see a movie with
friends this week; we went to see
the film for Sarah’s birthday.
You may ask; why not just put the
two clauses as separate sentences,
or use a conjunction?
You could do that, but the
semicolon shows that they are
related.Rule Number 2 2. To separate two independent clauses of the same theme that have been linked by a connective. E.g. I really wanted to grow up and study Physics; however, I found I was better at Chemistry. Why not just use a comma? They are each independent clauses, so you would have to use two commas, which would be incorrect.
Rule Number 3
3. To separate items in a list when
each item has separate features.
E.g. I went to the store and I
needed to buy some crispy, chicken
strips; a bunch of red, ripe apples;
and some cold, semi-skimmed milk.
Why not separate each of the items
with commas only? This would be
confusing as the adjectives are
already separated with commas.Activity 1: Punctuate Add the semicolons in the correct place on your sticker. 1. I ran to the air raid shelter the German Luftwaffe were flying overhead dropping bombs. 2. I searched for my parents in the darkness however the dust from the bombings was blinding. 3. In my evacuation suitcase I packed two woolen, winter jumpers a few of my reading books from school and letters my mother had written in preparation for my departure.
Activity 2: Using show not tell for
emotions and using semicolons correctly,
write a short 1st person passage describing
emotions and attitudes inspired by one of
these pictures.
Let's do a quick shared couple of sentences together first.Tuesday 12th January 2021 L.O: I understand why apostrophes are used
Apostrophes: What are they used for?
Apostrophes:
What are they used for?
1. Omission: creating contractions where missing letters
are replaced by an apostrophe
2. Possession: to show that one thing belongs to
anotherApostrophes:
What are they used for?
Omission: creating contractions where missing letters
are replaced by an apostrophe
Apostrophes used for omission are often used in
informal writing as they are often used in spoken
conversation.Examples of contractions
don’t
do not
can’t
can not
wouldn’t
would not
I’d
I would/ I had
he’d
he had/ he would
I’ll
I will
they’ll
they will
they’re
they areWednesday 13th January 2021 L.O: I can generate vocabulary
some dialogue/ quotes
based on individual and shared
experiences – show how you feel
(emotions and attitudes)
varying sentence length –
including active and passive
cohesive devices –
adverbials, Diary voice
conjunctions etc.
entry
toolkit
specific vocabulary relevant
to time period/setting
1st and 3rd person perspective
past tenseGlossary Creating Task • air raid shelter • Adolf Hitler • Luftwaffe • air raid siren • Blitz • evacuation • Blitzkreig • billeting officer • Nazis • wireless • Allied forces • ration book • axis • propaganda • Neville Chamberlain • blackout
Look at other extracts from ‘Diary of Anne Frank’
– are there phrases and/or vocabulary that could
be used to enhance your own writing?Short Burst Writing • Present tense – introductory paragraph
Thursday 15th January 2021 L.O: I can innovate a text as part of a shared write
How can we innovate?
Things to include: • Contracted forms of verbs – informal • 1st and 3rd person • varying sentence length • correct use of semicolon • show not tell for emotions and attitudes
Paragraphs Bare Bones My independent piece
You’ve escaped danger
Present tense
1 What you, your family have
done/survived. Can you start
with an exclamation?
Early chronology
Past tense
2 You’re taking part in a regular
(normal) activity.
Cohesive devices
Past tense
3 Air raid message is played
Show not tell – feelings/emotions
Cohesive devices
Past tense
4 Outside – panic/fright
Describe setting and show not tell
emotions
Air-raid shelter
Past tense
5 Show not tell
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